Hey luv the story! It is so cool. A lot of description. And you added ur only little twist to it. In the next chapter I think Sess should come in and kip nap Kagome and in about three months or so make fall in love with her.Thanks for a great story so far. I like how you used a lot of different words instead of always putting Kagome you used other words keep up the good writing.
-Sweetbunny :)
Fred- Thu 27 Mar 2008
| Must better on the summary, and more appealing to those who you are trying to get to read your story. Great job.
Fred- Wed 26 Mar 2008
If you want people to read what you write, you need to make sure it can be understood. Your summary makes no sense:
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Kagome gets taken over by a youkai, that can't reasonably hers. (what exactly does that mean?)
The youkai causes the disappearance of Inuyasha. When Sesshoumaru enters the picture Kagome has already distanced herself (distanced herself??? From what?), can he bring her back?
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