I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

“Hola bonita! Como estas? Rin fue muy triste cuando Kaggy duermio en la flor.”

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¡Hola papi chula! ¿Como estás? Rin fue muy triste cuando Kaggy dormio en el piso.



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“Hola Rinita. Yo soy Buena. No preocupacion. Estoy fina. Quieres tu tener algo helado despues de salidamos un hospital?” I asked.

¡Hola Rinita! Estoy muy bien, gracías. No te preocupas. ¿Quieres ir a comprar helado después de podemos salir este hospital?"


Remember the ser and estar saying:
"What you're feeling and who you are, you will use the verb estar. Be glad I caught this. Nile aka Nile-sama is fluent and would have had a hay day on it.


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“Si, muy mucho!” She replied excitedly. Meaning” Yes, very much!

¡Si quiero ir contigo!"

It is best to keep it short. "Muy mucho" is not proper and as bad as a double negative in English.

Oh! You made me laugh out loud! Thank you, thank you!

pleas up date this is a good story i am hucked.:)

Lol that was a funny chappy it had me and my friend laughing lol i cant get over the big daddy part!!! I laughed so hard i started choking!! Omg update soon

Katie and Mindy

Theres just something about your story that makes ma all hyper. Its not really good at this time of not but hehe im all happy but now ill start shaking and talking face and bouncing around but it doesnt matter because that was a gooooooood story so update soon PLEEEEEEAAAAAASEEEEEEEE!

Have a nice night...or day or w/e

Katie

that falling part has happend to me but in my room. And I am glad my mom was the one walking into my room. hahhhaa

Hey, I really enjoyed your fic. A very nice start! It was so funny and it had me in my seat throughout the whole chapter. Please update and post more chapters soon!