| okay save what chapters u can then delete the fic and repost it again it'll help i swear and u'll be able to crontrol the way u'r posting the new updations k!
Fred- Mon 25 Sep 2006
| The first chapter made for a fairly decent opening, however, for some reason, you have chapter one posted twice, and A/N, and then chapter 3 posted three times. There is no chapter 2, and while you do apologize in the last two postings of chapter three, none of it makes sense, as you are citing that you have finally posted a new chapter. This is confusing. When were you planning on posting chapter two? How does posting chapter three 3 times constitute posting chapter 3, 4, & 5??? Where is your story?
kat- Sun 24 Sep 2006
just to let you know that your chapters are mostly made up from repeating the chapters over again. i think you shoul check your story
Sesshy-Sama- Fri 22 Sep 2006
| No sh*t the thing needs cleaned up! I said not to read the last two chapters in my new 3rd chapter. Duh! * Sorry for being harsh or bitchy, I'm not in the mood for sh*t that you can see right infront of your eyes *
al- Fri 22 Sep 2006
you really need to clean this up.
you kept repeating the same chapter over..
three times!
it looked interesting,but until you do some major clean up and put in the correct chapters,i doubt anyone will read this story.
Raye:SesshyFan- Wed 13 Sep 2006
Awww, poor demon in Sesshoumaru ;; (pets) I'll speak to you :D XDDD
That was great XP :0 Sesshy has Sou'unga? Niiiiice >3 Oooo, can't wait =^^=
~Raye:SesshyFan waz hur :0 XDD
Jess: thats pretty good so far but i wanna kno y theres so many repeated chapters???
Miyoko: shut up you! my turn to praise the great one!!!!
Jess: T_T ur so stupid, mi!
Mi: -_- well ne way great story i would lov to read more^_^
Jess: keh! :3 but yea same here ^_^
| I think that idea sounds pretty good! you should definatley write it up!
| U Have Got Ta Update I Like The Way U Have Made Sessy Have A Older Sister Thats Realli Realli Coo ... SO Please Updat Please Please Pleas!!!!
| I really like your first two chapters. They are well thought and well written. I like the whole idea of Sesshoumaru having a twin sister. update soon
| This story is awesome! i gopeyou update soon!
phxazkyote- Sat 29 Jul 2006
| Need another Beta? I can help. I need something to keep me entertained during the day besides my job. This story sounds as if it is going to be really fun. As for a "Sesshy" why the dog ears if she is Sesshomaru's twin? I always thought that dog ears ment Half demon? I think its a wonderful idea thought. I was just curious to your reasoning behind it. Write more!
(chuckles) Oh, something I would do xP oo you do realize your universe it set to Alternate? Might want to change that to Canon xDD (prods) Really good xP Especially putting yourself in the story. Hehehe. (smacks Jaken with pan) >_>;; anyways, glad you liked my story, The Weird Swords xD I always have the nack to put comedy-no matter what the situation is xP
Until then-take care :0
~Raye
It's good, i like it. It has some spelling mistakes, but i like the characterization of Sesshoumaru. I love how he has a sister too. But where was she the whole time that the jewel-shard-journey was going on? just wondering...
Keep up the good work!
mamgadreams- Fri 21 Jul 2006
| I enjoyed your first two chapters. do a summary more people will read. The twin sister is a really interesting concept does inuyasha know her???
Sailor Linnea- Sun 09 Jul 2006
| I really like your beginning of this story.....it sounds promising for the contiune of this story. I hope you write more soon?
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