err ... sorry to put a little downer as a review for your story but I think you should get a beta reader. I like the plot and everything but I think you should work harder on doing grammar and punctuation. Each of your chapters are all in one paragraph and you can't really tell who's talking and who's not. I got a little confused. I also think you should try to put more of their own character and personality from the show and not too much OOCness. And if you're doing author's notes, please do them on a separate line, but it's good you did them in brackets. As much as possible, try to do ANs on separate lines.

All in all, I think the plot is good. Just work on grammar and punctuation. That will surely get your ratings up. =)

did you steal this story too?