i love this idea keep it going, it flows reallyy well

i like it keep going

I love this story! dont tell yourself you are a bad auther! (sp?) any ways, this story shows lots of potentiontal and I believe that if this is you first story than good for you! This is a very good first chapter, especally if you do nothave somone to beta it. I can nly encourage you to keep writng and you will get even better. Although some parts were kinda rough, and the scene change was a bit aquard, the story and you writting style will get even better. Also, everyone is in character (well I thought Kikyo was a bit ooc but she bacally came in then left so I see no real issue) The only thing I could see people complain about is the chapter length, but for you first chapter it is really good

Ja Ne!
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this is very good. it has good flow. just needs a proof reader to fix spelling and grammer. other then that it is a nice story. can't wait for part 2. bye for now ^-^ jp