Tatiana- Thu 03 Apr 2008
I LOVE it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Mutnodjmet- Wed 26 Mar 2008
Nicely done. You did not go over the top on the lemon. It works for me.

*hugs and smiles*

savewolf the angel of death- Wed 26 Mar 2008
its amazing loved it oh and if you have tiem can you go to fanfiction.net and read the story destined to be mates i wrote that one its a rated m for lemons lol and its a pairing between sesshomaru and my own made up char i hope you like it and maybe if you can send me an email or im me there in yahoo so we can chat and be friends maybe even help eachother writting the stories?

Priestess Skye- Wed 26 Mar 2008
Muah!!

You know i love this story. This gets the official Priestess Skye seal of approval. only one of it's kind so far ;)

Kagome357- Wed 26 Mar 2008
Yeah I really enjoyed that...Sess sneaking around the bushes like a skivvy perv...

The formatting thing is an issue though. It would be cool if the admins here could figure a way to make that easier...

Again, HOT HOT HOT!!

WhiteRose-Kurama- Wed 26 Mar 2008
That was some lemon! Wow! It was very tastefully done. Great job. Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading ur other fics. :P

Kagehime- Wed 26 Mar 2008
Nice lemon, but there are some formatting issues.. there are no paragraph breaks; the entire story is one block of text. I'm sure you had it formatted, perhaps the formatting was lost in the upload or incompatible?

There was one section where there was a duplication of a sentence following another sentence that made the sense of what you were saying difficult - it's toward the start, if you wish, I can point out exactly where it is.. the story is short, you'll find it without difficulty.

I think, perhaps, if you were able to fix these issues, it would be far easier to read and enjoy. The other errors, a few spelling, punctuation, lost letters, minimal stuff, but also nice to fix while you're formatting and fixing the duplication issue. With these things fixed, I'm sure the rating would go up and people would enjoy reading it far more.

Best of luck with the sequel (the other story) you are currently working on.

Take care, and keep writing ;)
Kage

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