Reviews for Perfect Enemy by sesshysbabygurl
swomeone- Mon 05 Nov 2007
Sessygurl- Mon 05 Nov 2007
Sessygurl- Mon 05 Nov 2007
trihn- Mon 05 Nov 2007
Kagome-Chan- Fri 26 Oct 2007
1- Your Spelling Stinks. As You Know, Just Reading Through What You Write Before You Post It Will Fix Some of That.
2- Its Not 'Know' Its 'Now' Thats 1 Word You ALWAYS Mess Up.
3- You Let the Story Run By Dialog. Talk About the Rooms Their In, What Their Wearing, Their Facial Expressions, and the Way They Think.
4- You Don't Explain Things Very Well, It's Choppy, and Hard to Understand. I Find Myself Having to Throw My Brain 4 Different Directions Whenever I Read It.
5- Your Plot Is Great!!!! It Makes An AMAZING Story Line!! -♥
Just Work On the Things I Told You About, and More People Will Want to Read Your Fic!! Please Ask Me About Anything You Don't Understand, and You Can Look At My Latest Fic If You Don't Understand How to Do Numbers 1-4. (I'm Currently Writing a Real Book of My Own, So I Know What I'm Talking About, Althogh I'm No Where NEAR Perfect!!) Good Luck, and Happy Writing! :]
Luv,
Kagome-Chan ♪
emoaiko- Thu 25 Oct 2007
emoaiko- Thu 25 Oct 2007
elizabeth e hogan- Wed 24 Oct 2007
Mitsukai- Sat 20 Oct 2007
Mitsukai
Lil Yasha- Fri 19 Oct 2007
jasmine- Thu 18 Oct 2007