C'mon plz UPDATE I require it. lol

This is so cool! Talk about a twist and a half. I mean, Hojo and Yuka being Kouga and Ayame?! No wonder Hojo was after Kagome after being let down and stood up so many times. I was a little confused at first, because I didn't know if Kagome knew Sesshoumaru was Sesshoumaru, but that last chapter cleared it up(I think). Anyway, this is very well written and hilarious. I can't wait until the next chapter.

dat was good please update soon

This is great!
Will you do me a favor will you read my new fic called Sign of the Crescent. I would like your oppinion. Please

I only give credit were credit is due your a good writer i can only hope that my stories end up half as good as yours has now. I hope to be able to read some more of your work later so for now I'll say good bye and post soon.

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It is easy to support a story that does have legs...I can see them *wink*. I enjoy stories that are different than the seeming norm. This has it. Please continue. We all will read.

I’m somewhat confused now. Is this ‘Kenshin’ person Sesshomaru or someone else? If so, who is ‘Kissyoten’? Is Sesshomaru married to her? It is a good story, and please don’t take this in the wrong way, but I think you just need to be a little more clear as to what is going on.

What I gather so far is that Naraku was defeated and Kagome is back in her own time. She does not know that ‘Hojo’ and ‘Yuka’ are actually Kouga and Ayame, but she knows that ‘Kenshin’ is Sesshomaru… right? And some deities are trying to hook them up?

Sigh… all the same I still see the potential in you. Practice makes perfect and whatnot.

Once again, be careful with editing. I found a couple boo-boos, but I’ll let you skip through the chapters and clean things up on your own… if you want to. Also, I think you need to start getting a plot really rooted into the story, because you do a good job of depicting it in the summary, but right now it’s almost like you’re rambling. Things are happening so fast that it’s hard to grasp. Take your time, don’t be impatient, and stretch things out. I know it seems boring, and you just want to get to the good stuff, but trust me, it will pay off in the end.
I can just tell when I look at your writing that you could be great, and I don’t want you to sell yourself short. Use your imagination. Take the time to really describe insignificant little things, like a shoe, or a stone, or… something. Just don’t be shy to get really into it. If you don’t delve, it might seem like the story is going nowhere.

This isn’t a flame, so please don’t be upset, I am just saying I know you can do better if you try; just a bit of constructive criticism to fuel your desire to write.

If you want to answer any of my questions my email is ‘jessip_14 @ hotmail.com’. There are no spaces in between it’s just that a lot of the time an email address doesn’t show up if you put in a review normally. I don’t have an account here but I don’t want to be one of those anonymous writers who you can’t get back to.

Thanks hon.

~J

It’s a very nicely written piece. The plot seems original and interesting, and captured my attention. Your style is wonderful, the rhythm of your words impeccably fluid. Nicely done, and I commend you on that.

The only thing I might advise is that you be very meticulous when editing. For example, when I read the summary, I could tell that your story was going to be worth my time. A lot of people judge fiction by its title, and unless you meant to for some odd purpose, you spelled ‘The Prochesy’ wrong. It’s actually a ‘c’, not an ‘s’. ‘Prophecy’.

Not trying to sound like a know it all bitch, but if you fix that I bet a lot more people will read this fanfic. It’s just that, when people see a spelling error in a title, they automatically think, ‘Oh this story is going to be amateurish and full of spelling and grammatical errors.’

Anyways, I think your story has great potential, and I look forward to reading more. And one more piece of advice… I’ve come to find, over my many years of reading and writing, that details are what tend to make a story great (besides the plot, of course). Don’t be scared to get really descriptive. Imagery is like a reader’s aphrodisiac.

~J

I quite like...please, please continue. Entirely different voice from the usual.

Oh please post more soon.
can't wait to see how he tells her.

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Oh hell you better write more if for no one else do it for me please this sound so cool she unknowingly wrote her own prophesy. post soon.

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