| very cool. gotta love the fact that people fear kagome more than him. even the fact that she can kick his ass is funny
ScarBaby3*8- Fri 01 Jun 2007
| Hay Samantha love the story, by the way its me Britt. So are you still going to help me with my stories. call me Okay. LaterScarBaby3*8. P.S. LOVE YA
Sirinya- Sat 21 Apr 2007
| I closed it after one look.... Use paragraphs next time and maybe I'll actually read it
Noacat- Sat 21 Apr 2007
| Oh... wow. See I clicked on this because the summary looked interesting but, wow, your formatting needs some work. Big time. You need to separate large blocks of text into more manageable paragraphs. Also, each line of dialog has to be separated into its own paragraph. It'll help with the readability which, as of now, is nearly non-existent. And I'd love to read this story, I really would.
DarkAngel495- Fri 20 Apr 2007
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uPdAtE sOoN!! tHANkS!!
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SapphireDog- Fri 20 Apr 2007
It was a good one-shot. Just a little advice don't make it one HUGE paragraph it gets hard to read and you can lose your place easily. Seperate ur sentences into a 5 to at least 10 sentences long. that makes it a whole lot eaiser to read.
I am not try to be mean or anything so please don't take this review the wrong way.
Other than that it was a good one-shot.
| hi it is good but i do suggest you space it out alot it was kinda hard to read. well other than that it was great
al- Fri 20 Apr 2007
paragraphs would be nice.
putting some space between blocks of this story would help any positive ratings.
i'm not for this,but i'm not against it.
i know it's pretty good,but please...space.
good luck with all future endeavors.
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