| that was sooper cute, good show.
Megan Consoer- Thu 13 Sep 2007
| I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
| Great concept, do believe the love scene was rushed though...with a few more details and a little more time and space it could be a really good piece. Yes we have 500 years of wating and need here, but it could be better felt with a bit more background and POVs both Kags and of course Sesshoumaru's. It would sweeten their respective conquest. Beyond that, pretty good!
pretty good lemon might want to considere extending it...
one note of grammer that was bugging me... you kept switching between active and passive voice
active= character doing the action
passive= character having action done to them
it wasn't often but it is just somethign to be aware of
swtdrm01- Sun 08 Apr 2007
| I loved it and I truly believe this one shot can be turned into a story. It has lots of potential.
Metis- Sun 08 Apr 2007
| Nice to have them reunite once again. May it be for a LONG time with lots of full youkai pups. heh.
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