Please don't let this end like the book with the toad thing. I wish that kag could end up w/ sess, but not age... ya know?

Also, the man in the yellow suit, is he going to be naraku?

~please dont let them die
~zen

Okay so first things first, i loved the book Tuck everlasting, it's one of my favorite and I really hope you can do justice to it, so far it's not bad but just remember you have some pretty big shoes to fill by taking on this story.

I hope you don't think I'm trying to discourage you I'm not and I honestly wish you luck i think you have a great idea.

~Dark

Hun...you need to think about getting a beta reader or a word processer with spell check. This story is very confusing, the setting, when you have people talking you need to start a new paragraph. This needs to be redone, good idea but get a beta reader.