wow, you have done a very good job at protraying thoughts and emotions while making the story flow in an orderly fashion but not to the extent as to where it seems like an essay.
you have also done a very goood job with making the characters seem realistic and very in character, such as how you portray Seshoumau. that is something i am having a bit of trouble with in my story. but i like how it is set, anyways please update soopn and i will review.
The Lonely Miko
another awesome chapter!
I hope you update soon okay!
Ja Ne!
Jean- Fri 06 Jul 2007
I'm guessing Sesshoumaru's scheme is either seduction or offering to teach her sword play. Or are those the same thing?
Isis- Fri 06 Jul 2007
Yipeee another update! *whew* this story is so angsty...and pain riddled. I cannot believe everyone is gone! And I really like the way you are moving the story along. The resentment, the confusion, the pain...great just great....Oh and I must say this is my favorite line of the chapter..."Even that tear wasn’t full of grief. It just was. " That was fantastic...and true. I cannot wait to your next chapter. Till then I am going to read some of your light, humorous writings to cheer myself up...Goodness knows some of your stuff makes me laugh out loud!
CobaltHeart- Fri 06 Jul 2007
This was a really good chapter. Sesshomaru is just so, well so, in this story. I find it funyn he cant just understand why Kagome does what she does. Anyways if he asked I';m sure he'd tell her.
This Story Is Getting Interesting! Please Update As Soon As U Can!!!!
Peace, Luv, and Swords,
Kagome-Chan
Jean- Thu 05 Jul 2007
I am enjoying the story so far. I like to read about a strong Kagome, one with relentless determination. I hope someone tells her that Inuyasha is already dead so she does not need to save him, but she still needs to eliminate Naraku. I can understand why Sesshoumaru has reverted to closing off his softer emotions. However, logic or the Fates keep staying his hand from killing her and he keeps following her. Soon I believe the sword acquisition will become second to his curiosity of, if nothing else, how Kagome manages to stay alive and proceed toward her goal.
wow that was pretty good!
I hope you update soon with a whole knew chapter!
It was just awesome!
Ja Ne!
this is a good story. It has a great plot and character personalities. So Inu is really dead??
When I read the summary on the main page I wasnt expecting much from this because usually everybody overdoes kagome becoming depressed/having a dark side. But I like this. I really do. I hope you update often because im actually pretty into your story. I know it said that you need criticisms but honestly I cant find anything wrong with your story. So keep up the good work.
wow sorry this is so long.
Androgynous- Wed 04 Jul 2007
ITS GREAT!! i love the beginning..
OnyxLife1916- Tue 03 Jul 2007
Hey, great story. I can't wait to see how the other chapters are going to turn out. Email me when you update the other chapters. onyxlife1916@yahoo.com
elvira- Sun 01 Jul 2007
more chapters please!!
***Smile***
Continue...
Ch. 2
I'm really liking this so far.
It's good to see one every no and then where they aren't instantly in love with each other (although those are good too).
I do wonder why he didn't try to take the sword though, does he only want it if she throws it away?
-aura
1st chap.
Wow. Simply wow.
...and her mother smiled?!?
She'd covered in blood, her friends are dead, she's running into more danger, and says she most likely won't come back: and her mother smiled?!?
Okay...
I'm off to read chap. 2
-aura
I Really Like This Story. Please Update As Soon As U Can!!!!
Peace, Luv, and Sorrow,
Kagome-Chan
Isis- Wed 31 Jan 2007
I like what you have here so far. The characters are true, and your writing is quite descriptive. You seem to be taking your time with
the development of the story, which is so important. I look forward to see where you go with the story from here!! Keep up the great writing!!!
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