It was a beautiful poem...

Okay, I see now. I had to reread it a few times, and then the metaphors truly smacked me on the head. :)
Good job!
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Yeah, I get it, Geez, who do you take me for?? The short lines do the trick, your poem is very descriptive, even if at first it may not seem that way. I like it.

It's pretty good. A lot of symbolism everywhere, but at the same time descriptive without using a lot of words. I like the tempo and flow. Good to have you back again!

i'll whine i don't understand but frankly i get the gist so i'm not going to... however, romantic poetry... ick, can't professors just let you enjoy the stuff without analyzing it? the one thing i always hated about my english classes, analyzing something that was just better left alone

YAY!! another fic by you. Great job. Please update Divine Concubine as soon as you can-

--Silk_worm