Beautifully written so far, I started crying almost as soon as I started reading. But the fact that you have Rin speaking in the first person ruined the effect. Rin speaks like this: "Rin is so happy to see you!!" Not like this: "I am so happy to see you!!" See the difference? As wonderful as the fic is so far, I was really put off by the inaccuracy of Rin's character. Please fix it?

hi- I just came across your fic...It's really good, sad yes....but really descriptive and detailed.

please update soon, I can't wait to see what happens.

ta!
Silk_worm

hey great story. ya, its sad and i wanted to gag as you described all the gore, but the story has a bit to it that despite anguish and death, i want more! Sad thing is, i dont come to SS often, if not ever. So i ask a favor of you, dear author, to please, when you update, to send me an email and link. Even if its a few days, i will either forget all about this or will be unable to get on cus my brother hogs it. I really loved this chapter. Please, keep it comming. !!! Laters
Ymir-chan