I enjoy your story. However, you need to get a Beta-reader. The spelling errors make it very hard to understand what you mean at times. Even if you just had someone do a quick scan of what you've wrote, you could have alot of your mistakes fixed.
arijita- Sun 14 Oct 2007
you write pretty well and the story is very engaging, but i think you should get a beta-reader for your story, because there are a few mistakes. they make for good, if unintentional, comedy. eg, "futile" japan, in the first paragraph! LOL that one cracked me up.
I loved this story and i am glad to have decided to have read it.
It was wonderful .
Kamorea Chan
Even though Sesshomaru endend up with Kagome; this is a dark fiction in my opinion. This was written well except for some spelling issues which at times did drive me a little nuts trying to figure out the correct word you meant. Overall it is an excellent story although I can't say I was happy reading it as it was sad. Your story seemed to compel me with a horrible fascination to keep reading. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more of your stories.
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