You should spell check and learn the difference between "Their" "They're" and "There". Their is possession like "That is their home" They're is "They're dancing" and 'There' is "There is the house". Make sure you use them correctly. Also make sure that if you have two characters talking together...have their speech separated instead of muddled together in one paragraph or whatever. :)

dude tat was fukin funy what you did to inu and the story is amazin i cant wait to read the rest it has one twist after another i am amazed love yo story cant wait buh bye angelfox

You mispelled Sango you speeled it songo