I think this last chapter wasn't as good as the ones before it...
I'm a little disappointed. I still think you're a good writer, of course...Perhaps it's the passive part of the plot. Yes, we got to know what Sara's plan is and what Naraku's plans are. And also that Naraku isn't finished with Bankotsu... And that's great, because it shows how thick the plot is. But... There was something amiss. Like you didn't put your whole heart into it...
I also think that Kagome and Sesshoumaru's kiss seemed... very awkward. Like you just didn't know how to make it happen so you just put it there and expected the characters to fall into the scene. I was actually shocked that Sesshoumaru mentioned the kiss. I was even more shocked that they talked about Ryura and Kagome didn't back away. I mean, it doesn't make sense to be kissing someone else when you already have someone. Yes, she had already been kissed by Sesshoumaru. But that was Sesshoumaru's beast and Kagome wasn't ready to handle that.
I don't know... I just thought it was a weird kiss.
It is not my intention at all to flame. I only wanted to tell you my honest opinion because I know you can do much better than this.
Keep updating! Don't stop, please. Even if a chapter out of a hundred comes out a little... not too great... doesn't mean you are not great. You are awesome.
I hope you don't take any offense by this.
xoxo
~krazy
they will have an excuse depending on what hand Sesshomaru writes with... I mean he can't exactly write a letter if he is missing the hand he write with now can he? bet that would derail her (Sara) rather quickly :smirk:
Keep it coming.
I love how you use obscure characters from the show in your story. I feel that it is very well thought out and I can't wait to read more about what Sara is planing. I hope that she really steps in it and Sesshoumaru just cuts off all ties to her. She's a really awesome bad guy character. I can't wait for the next update!!!
I am so happy there is an updated, I could cry right now! You just made my Sunday!(: please update soon!
e best Sess/Kag stories I've ever read and I'm so excited for it to be updated! :)
yay!!!! first kiss now they just need to work on getting into a real realtionship... that is going to be interesting!
Amazing story! I love all the plots going, Can hardly wait for the next chapter to be up!
Keep up the Fantastic work! Love it!
I wonder when Sesshoumaru's other half will let Kagome in on how much he wants her ;3
I'm so excited for this story! It's development keeps me on my toes and I just can't wait for the next update!!
Absolutely bloomin' marvelous chapter! The interaction between Totosai and Inuyasha had me rolling on the floor with laughter. And I do so love how despicable Sara-hime is. She makes my teeth ache :)
Well worth the wait, I shall try and be patient for the next chapter.
Thank you :D
Lmaoo oh that os going to be an interesting conversation please update soon! I can not wait(:
Keep it coming, Happy Belated Mother's Day!
Ahhhhh I need more!! <3
ahhhhhhh! unintentional kiss! Love love love!
I AM TOTALY HOOKED ON THIS STORY, I CHECK ON IT EVERYDAY TO SEE IF YOU 'VE UPDATED MORE CHAPTERS.
I just found this beautiful jewel! Please keep updating, the plot is soon original and interesting.
So glad u updated! Was looking forward to it :)
Great update can't wait for more~!!!
Yay a new chapter! Oh I like this story!
I am soooo looking forward to the next chapter!!
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