It's in interesting story but I think you should do a recheck for the chapter in case. I noticed some things that are maybe missing, mispelled, or forgot to add something in the sentence. You should make the chapter a little longer with maybe more details in the story. But most of all I think you kind of rush the story too quickly.

I really like this so far, it is pretty much awesome! I like that the plot is unique and this seems different from other stories. Keep up the good work and update soon!! :D

Waaa! sugoi! i love the chapter, please, update soon, i want to read more!!!!!