Hi, I loved the story; truly remarkable. You kept everyone in character and it never got dull or predictable. I would like to ask you for a copy of the hole story to save in my computer so i that i may be able to reread it at any time, even offline.
Thanks, and i am looking foward to new fics from you.
i love love love this story! i have read it many times & it is one of my favorite stories.
Wow this story was great, well done! I look forward to reading the sequel!
Honestly, inuyasha can be such a brat. He acthe first then regrets it later. Sighs, he seriously has some growing up to do.
lol i do wonder fi they have anymore kids. and it's kidna funny inuyasha and rin but i suspected rin to be miko as well. it was lamsot funny who closely she resembled kagome and kikyou
No matter how many times I read your story, i keep falling more in love with it <3
I'm finally leaving a review after reading this story years ago, the story was amazing it had a wonderul ending and I enjoyed it.
Inuyasha you mood/moment killer!!!
This is the best chapter I love it! Yahoo Sesshoumaru ask Kagome to be his mate!
Review time, and not even a third of the way through the story... More like "critique time". Ugh. Okay, you obviously say you know PoV, and you do. However, my old Creative Writing teacher would have, at the point I am, possibly thrown the paper away. Or at least, my old High School English teacher would have xD CW Teach would probably just be cringing and marking up with a happy little red pen.
I know this will probably mean nothing at all, and has very possibly been mentioned already, but I'd like to say it anyway. You need to be consistent with the point of view, and tense of the story! Otherwise it can give a headache. You start out somewhat confusing, but we figure out that "oh, okay, these are Kagome's thoughts." And you jump from past-tense, to present-tense, to past-tense. And then, when she sees who is at the well, you jump to first-person, and back to third!
I was looking forward to reading the story, when I read the summary I'd thought "Oh, that sounds good," but holy crap is it a whirlwind already. I will attempt to read it, just because it does look really good; but its also possible that I might get tired of mental-rewriting. :/ In that case, its a very sad thing because of how good of a story this sounds.
Anyway... The likeliness of a rewrite is slim to none, but I'm going to encourage it anyway.
*gaspflail* Oh and this is in no way a flame DDDD: I loathe flames. Not flame! *meep* I just like trying to help people with advice... D:
*scoots off to do more reading*
they fall in love to fast....and sess is out of charcter for me im sorry
it strated out nice. i kinda feel it real when u mention kagura dying.
but part that rin being his adopted daughter it be nice if u could change it into his ward.
don't u think is too uhhhmmm idk almost imitating..
The story was a bit too jumpy for my taste sorry but you do have potential just work on making it less all over the place
someone FLAMED YOU!!! That person can go though the 7 hells because you write the most amazing storys i have ever read. I hope you dont think much about flames because the only reason ppl send them is because they cant write anything better. BTW i LOVE the story. take cares
HAHA!!! i live for random funny moments like this!
Omg... Best STORY EVER!! I really enjoy it.
I loved this story. It was very good. I cant wait to read the sequel. I am excited. Thanks for writing a fantastic story!!!!
OMG!!! That was the funniest S*** I have read in a long time. I could not stop laughing. I started to cry. Poor Sesshoumaru having to deal with an imp that does not know how to keep his mouth shut. Great chapter.
I loved this chapter. I could not stop laughing when Rin Said It was Raining Jaken-samas and then when Shippou asked “Are anymore going to fall out from the sky?” It was so Funny. great job.
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