You should enlist the help of a beta. While engaging, your story needs grammatical help - you switch between tenses a lot.
you did well, in fact if you keep up the fic, i'm sure to get addicted to you... update soon kay....
oh i did like it very much!! Im on the edge of my seat. I can wait to find out what happens! Great job!
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