There is so much more that could have been done with this. It's really good, though you have a few continuty errors.

You need to re-read your work. There was a lot of grammar error in your work. Also some of the paragraphs made no sense.

aaaaaaaawwwww!!!! people do deserve second chances. i'm glad sesshomaru and kagome got theirs, though inuyasha and kikyo im not so sure :)