I can umm......I can be your betta if u would like but I don't exactly know what betrays do so if u tell me I'll take the job 
Hi, I really want to enjoy your story. It seems interesting as far as I can manage to read but could you possibly consider getting a beta?  There are so many grammatical errors as well as other things that it really takes away from the story and I'm sure as a writer, you would love to have your story enjoyed by everyone.   Hopefully This doesn't   Dissuade you from continuing to write. 
best of luck, 
  TIO 
      
Lammy (Chapter 1) -  Sun 03 Apr 2016 
Can't wait to read more! 
      
I love it riran. . And i have read it in ff.net XD . . but kinda sad with the ending part. . but then i have to read the epilogue, and totally love it!! 
      
   
   
 
 
 
										 
									
									
																										
								
								
								
																								
															
													
					
				
								
				
				
			
				
				
		
				
	
			
			
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